Sample:
The given data presents the changes in the number of guests
and their levels of satisfaction during the pre- and post-renovation period of
Ashdown Museum.
An overview of the table shows the notable rise in the
overall number of visitors who went to the museum after the year of its
renovation. While the two pie charts reveal the decline of guests’ dissatisfaction
and the surge of their satisfaction.
According to the graphs, there was a higher number of people
who seem to be unhappy with their trip to the museum during the year before
Ashdown museum’s refurbishment. However, these figures changed significantly
after the revamping of the building. The dissatisfaction percentage went down
to an average of 50 percent. In contrast, guests’ fulfillment climbed up from
30% to 40% (satisfied) and 15% to 35% (very satisfied).
Although the results seem to give a positive output both in total
guest number and meeting the guests’ expectations, it is also important to note
that the rate in which people could not provide a specific response remains to
be unchanged in both time frame.
Word Count: 181
The last praragraph seems to be your opinion and it is not recommended in task 1.
ReplyDeleteResults give a positive output both in total guest number and meeting the guests’ expectations, but the rate in which people could not provide a specific response remains to be unchanged in both time frame.
DeleteVery well explained. I think you should had to split your paragraph into 2 paragraphs and there was no need of last para
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